英语大牛们,急!急需帮助!港大个人简介,请帮助修改!话说,15号截止,250字内,也就是今晚···时间紧迫,期望你的帮助、批评、指教·····刚憋出一点点,请帮忙改正~~As a mainland student, HKU is an attr

英语大牛们,急!急需帮助!港大个人简介,请帮助修改!话说,15号截止,250字内,也就是今晚···时间紧迫,期望你的帮助、批评、指教·····刚憋出一点点,请帮忙改正~~As a mainland student, HKU is an attr
英语大牛们,急!急需帮助!港大个人简介,请帮助修改!
话说,15号截止,250字内,也就是今晚···时间紧迫,期望你的帮助、批评、指教·····
刚憋出一点点,请帮忙改正~~
As a mainland student, HKU is an attractive school in my mind. Meanwhile, at the approach of HKU, I find the further steps I take towards her, the tighter I get attached to her. The rich history, extraordinary teaching capacity and international learning atmosphere allow me to integrate functional skills, leading me to perfect myself.
I chose Business and Economics as my first will .The study of economics provides explanations and predictions, as well as more universal theories, which can help me explain human behavior, and offer insight into the validity of the various political choices competing for our favor.
下一段,想写个人经历,因为的确稍有不同.中文如下,请帮忙翻译···谢谢谢谢···
I believe that each experience is a fortune.三年高中近一年缺席课堂,经历使我成为今天的自己.数学竞赛让我思维敏捷,辩论比赛让我机智表达,班长工作让我细心负责,车祸病痛让我坚强勇敢,这一切,给我一颗坚韧的心,我跟随它,向港大梦想勇敢前行.
愿最美好的年华,与港大相遇.Thanks you for your valuable patience and time.
我的确写的有点不对路,但我真的不想写一些没用的夸奖,又无奈英语成绩非常有限········期待你的帮助!

英语大牛们,急!急需帮助!港大个人简介,请帮助修改!话说,15号截止,250字内,也就是今晚···时间紧迫,期望你的帮助、批评、指教·····刚憋出一点点,请帮忙改正~~As a mainland student, HKU is an attr
关于你前面自己些的,有一些错误给你说下吧.已经帮你改正了
As a mainland student,I am really attracted attracted by HKU(原因：主语是I,所以主句用HKU就不对了) Meanwhile,at the approach of entering HKU,I find the further steps I take towards her,the tighter I get attached to her.The rich history,extraordinary teaching capacity and international learning atmosphere allow me to learn functional skills and perfect myself.
下面这段是你即将做的吧,所以时态应该用一般将来时
I will choose Business and Economics as my first will because the study of economics provides explanations and predictions,as well as more universal theories,which can help me explain human behavior,and offer insight into the validity of the various political choices competing for our favor.
I was absent from high school for almost a year.And the experience make who I am today.Mathematical competition gave me quick thinking.Debate competition made my expression wiser .Being a monitor made me more careful and responsible.And the pain from the car accident makes me strong and brave.All of these give me a persevering heart,which I will follow after and keep moving forward to HKU bravely.I do hope I could have the opportunity to study in HKU.Thanks you for your valuable patience and time.